Sunday, 29 July 2012

Our Jetty

The pale sun soaked boards smoothed soft by the feet of many memories

begin to thrum a steady beat under me and my splashing toes

louder and louder until his leap and whooping dive drenches me


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blue crystal mirror

circled by cricket laughter

filled with white swan clouds

promising summer pleasure

beckoning with winking waves


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19 comments:

  1. Mono lyth29 July 2012 at 06:15

    Oh... I LIKE this!

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  2. Milli Musings29 July 2012 at 06:21

    I love Your Jetty and this is a wonderful write on both counts.

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  3. Kae B29 July 2012 at 07:19

    Two very descriptive poems, and yet you've managed to keep them to 55 words all together! I think the story flow needed the order to be reversed, but it's still nice!

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  4. ninetynine reasons29 July 2012 at 07:33

    *pleased*

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  5. ninetynine reasons29 July 2012 at 07:34

    Thanks, I have a thing for jetties. Love the feel of the wood combined with the smell of the water.

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  6. ninetynine reasons29 July 2012 at 07:35

    You're absolutely right! I didn't even see that they could be connected! :)

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  7. Roger That!29 July 2012 at 09:08

    sublime!!

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  8. Pat Angloswiss29 July 2012 at 11:54

    I enjoy that stay on the jetty

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  9. Mi amor Tú eres mía29 July 2012 at 13:11

    Excellent!!

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  10. ninetynine reasons29 July 2012 at 20:37

    ty :) I'm practising some new poem forms I learned from a writer.

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  11. ninetynine reasons29 July 2012 at 20:38

    Something carefree about a jetty!

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  12. ninetynine reasons29 July 2012 at 20:38

    Thanks for the encouragement :)

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  13. desay unogratis30 July 2012 at 09:42

    I'm gonna talk to the teacher and see if she will get you extra credit points for this post..... I Likey....

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  14. joyce cooper30 July 2012 at 10:11

    fantastically created into your own masterpiece....and I love it!!!

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  15. Lynne M-S31 July 2012 at 03:55

    Well done, 99!

    The poems really work well together!

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  16. ninetynine reasons31 July 2012 at 06:28

    :) The teacher might deduct points for me tryin to be a smarty pants.

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  17. ninetynine reasons31 July 2012 at 06:31

    I was inspired by the pic...and a little personal reflection.. I tend to dabble my toes, while he dives headlong in with a yell :)

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  18. ninetynine reasons31 July 2012 at 06:32

    Thank you for the chance to try something new. I like fiddling with words :)

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  19. Frosty Is Ready To Move On...4 August 2012 at 00:08

    Very nice and so is the jetty...

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I'm not in just now, but you're welcome to stay a while and doodle me a note. Make yourself a cuppa if you like, otherwise there's some beer in the fridge, and probably some left-over chocolate cake. No pinching my turkish delight though, and whatever you do, don't feed the cat, she's completely loony.

Lottie

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